Generally I think it's great, I'd probably be more inclined to use bullet points rather than lots of text, as it makes it far easier for people to read, even if they are skim reading!!
I think it might help people to understand a bit more if there are some more 'because's ' as people don't like to be told what to do :roll: unless they understand why.
So, for example, I'd work it more like (this is only a bit of quick blurb) "Rabbits are frequently bought as a childs pet, however contrary to popular belief, they are not really suitable as pets for children and often end up overlooked in a hutch or given to a rescue centre. Children getting bored is sadly the most common reason for rabbits being given to rescue centres. If you are considering buying a rabbit as a child's pet, please consider the following:
- The most common reason that children get bored with their rabbit is because they cannot pick it up and cuddle it as they expected. Occasionally you will find an extremely friendly rabbit who seems to enjoy this, but mostly they are independent animals who prefer to be left to do their own thing. Unlike cats and dogs, rabbits are prey animals so their instinct tells them that being picked up means that they are going to be eaten. Young children are unable to understand this and want to pick up and cuddle the rabbit, without realising that this can be a very frightening experience for the animal. Frightened rabbits also can kick, bite and scratch if they think they are going to be picked up. Owners must be prepared to accept that rabbits are not like cats and dogs and to enjoy them as a pet on the rabbits own terms
- Rabbits have extremely strong back legs and can cause serious injury if they struggle whilst being handled, which is very common. Young children are not strong or stable enough to make the rabbit feel secure or to handle a rabbit without risk of injury to themselves or the rabbit.
etc...
Sorry, I'm not trying to be critical, it's just that I write waffle for a living so I've got lots of experience at how to capture the target audience :wink:
I think it might help people to understand a bit more if there are some more 'because's ' as people don't like to be told what to do :roll: unless they understand why.
So, for example, I'd work it more like (this is only a bit of quick blurb) "Rabbits are frequently bought as a childs pet, however contrary to popular belief, they are not really suitable as pets for children and often end up overlooked in a hutch or given to a rescue centre. Children getting bored is sadly the most common reason for rabbits being given to rescue centres. If you are considering buying a rabbit as a child's pet, please consider the following:
- The most common reason that children get bored with their rabbit is because they cannot pick it up and cuddle it as they expected. Occasionally you will find an extremely friendly rabbit who seems to enjoy this, but mostly they are independent animals who prefer to be left to do their own thing. Unlike cats and dogs, rabbits are prey animals so their instinct tells them that being picked up means that they are going to be eaten. Young children are unable to understand this and want to pick up and cuddle the rabbit, without realising that this can be a very frightening experience for the animal. Frightened rabbits also can kick, bite and scratch if they think they are going to be picked up. Owners must be prepared to accept that rabbits are not like cats and dogs and to enjoy them as a pet on the rabbits own terms
- Rabbits have extremely strong back legs and can cause serious injury if they struggle whilst being handled, which is very common. Young children are not strong or stable enough to make the rabbit feel secure or to handle a rabbit without risk of injury to themselves or the rabbit.
etc...
Sorry, I'm not trying to be critical, it's just that I write waffle for a living so I've got lots of experience at how to capture the target audience :wink:
Just on there own no other stuff
